S.O.S

So, I need your help. I rewrote the prologue to my novel, after a suggestion from one of the agents I queried, and I still don't know which version I prefer. Read about my predicament here on the writing blog, and get excited for a little sneak peak of the prologue and chapter 1. If you'd be so kind, read both versions and tell me what you think. I really need some feedback!